Kiana's Extended Note
I spent a lot of time at the writing center revising my pieces. Some of the things I had highlighted and needed to work on the tutor with the writing center agreed on. For the major revisions on my memoir the tutor read it and said that it didn't quite make sense on how I organized it, so I completely changed it around a fixed some sentences and even took some parts out so it would flow better. On the major revisions for my proposal was really working on sentence structure, I had a lot of run ons. I fixed those and also worked on grammar and I read it out loud a few times to make sure it flowed correctly.
I decided I wanted to use the poem we had created before we wrote are report. With my memoir and proposal I feel like my poem is the last piece to my story and it show cased my whole issue and kind of the history behind voting. I’m going to do a recording of me reading it through. Then on the page I will provide the voice recording the actual text and then hyperlink certain words from the poem to a certain picture so it will be a picture essay and a poem. Voting to me translates to the people voice and that’s exactly what I want to with my voice. It will be a different medium and a picture essay all in one. It think it will turn out really well.
I excluded my report because I felt like it was boring and it didn't show my unique style of writing and it didn't add to my story. I didn't use my cartoon just because I felt like that was an early project and I was still getting into my issue and discovering sources so it didn't really apply to the magazine project. Like I said I thought the two papers I chose worked well with everyone’s, and to me that’s why we were put in these groups to make the magazine flow and show case us as individuals as writers.
I decided I wanted to use the poem we had created before we wrote are report. With my memoir and proposal I feel like my poem is the last piece to my story and it show cased my whole issue and kind of the history behind voting. I’m going to do a recording of me reading it through. Then on the page I will provide the voice recording the actual text and then hyperlink certain words from the poem to a certain picture so it will be a picture essay and a poem. Voting to me translates to the people voice and that’s exactly what I want to with my voice. It will be a different medium and a picture essay all in one. It think it will turn out really well.
I excluded my report because I felt like it was boring and it didn't show my unique style of writing and it didn't add to my story. I didn't use my cartoon just because I felt like that was an early project and I was still getting into my issue and discovering sources so it didn't really apply to the magazine project. Like I said I thought the two papers I chose worked well with everyone’s, and to me that’s why we were put in these groups to make the magazine flow and show case us as individuals as writers.